Well, if I'm not sure what to do when I'm writing (not a story but for instance a letter or some advice) I usually do a couple of revisions so I can look at them side by side.
So, for instance, what is causing Blair's agonizing? It could be that he never thought of himself as falling in love with any guy, much less Jim. That's angst that generated from within Blair.
Is he agonzing because when he made his declaration Jim didn't give him an immediate "I love you too Blair" and then Blair leaves in embarassment? That's caused by Blair reacting to external events.
In these examples, if I were writing, I'd do a draft of each, since you said the story is pretty short, so it's not a hardship to put down several variations. Then see which one flows best for you.
Or you could just leave it as is and let people read a sweet little story. Nothing wrong with that -- it will make people smile. You can save the agony for the next fic!
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Date: 2009-03-08 03:30 am (UTC)So, for instance, what is causing Blair's agonizing? It could be that he never thought of himself as falling in love with any guy, much less Jim. That's angst that generated from within Blair.
Is he agonzing because when he made his declaration Jim didn't give him an immediate "I love you too Blair" and then Blair leaves in embarassment? That's caused by Blair reacting to external events.
In these examples, if I were writing, I'd do a draft of each, since you said the story is pretty short, so it's not a hardship to put down several variations. Then see which one flows best for you.
Or you could just leave it as is and let people read a sweet little story. Nothing wrong with that -- it will make people smile. You can save the agony for the next fic!
Good luck!